Sentence Fluency

Before

One account that failed to appear in Herzog’s film, that is mentioned by John Rogers, entails Timothy Treadwell scaring away “major film companies like the BBC [who] came to create documentaries that would educate millions, Timothy disrupted their filming by yelling and charging up and down streams to scare away the bears” (Rogers). While there is zero evidence, it seems to match with the footage of Treadwell’s interactions with the Park Service and hunters that Herzog showed us.

After

John Rogers mentions an account that Herzog failed to include in his film. Treadwell scared away "major film companies like the BBC [who] came to create documentaries that would educate millions, Timothy disrupted their filming by yelling and charging up and down streams to scare away the bears” (Rogers). while the evidence is nonexistent, Rogers' story seems to match with the footage Herzog chose to show of Treadwell’s interactions with the Park Service and hunters.